Thursday, 20 September 2012

Molly's 100 Word Challenge- Week 2

We were just sitting down for dinner when the doorbell rang. It was another trick-or-treater, I gave them their sweets and lumbered back to the dinner table, frustrated. I just couldn't wait any longer, "Mum, whens Ben coming?" I whined.
 "Soon.." Mum replied. The doorbell rang again, "It must be him this time!" I rushed to the door exited. "BOO!" yelled Ben.
"Finally, your here!" I exclaimed. We ran into the back yard, tring to avoid all the spiders and cobwebs. I tripped, fell to the clod damp ground. I lay there for a few minutes, listening to a laugh...

Then I realised it was Chuckles the Clown......
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  1. Anonymous21 September 2012 at 11:48

    hi Molly !
    I think your 100wc is great. I especially like the part were you lay on the ground and hear a laugh, It's really tence since you don't know whats going to happen. Who's Ben though?

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    1. Molly R21 September 2012 at 21:40

      Thanks, and who is this commenting? I'm really glad you liked it. Ben is my cousin! In real life! :-)

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  2. Anonymous21 September 2012 at 11:50

    Wow Molly, that piece of writin is amazing. I liked that you used different words instead of said and walked. You are a really good writer. Well done.
    From Emelia

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    1. Molly R21 September 2012 at 21:38

      Thank-you Emelia. I'm glad that you liked it! I thought giving it differnt words would make it a bit more mysterious! :)

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    2. elise28 September 2012 at 11:35

      Your right molly this is really mysterieous i really want to read more.




      Elise

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    3. Isaac2 October 2012 at 16:36

      I agree too!

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  3. Isaac and Grace21 September 2012 at 11:51

    Wow Molly, I think 100wc was brilliant! I just wonder who is Chuckles the Clown... he sounds evil!

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    1. Molly R21 September 2012 at 21:35

      Thanks Isaac and Grace, and I'd better not tell you who Chuckles the Clown is.... :-)

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    2. Charlotte D24 September 2012 at 16:34

      I agree with you , that was exellent .

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    3. elise28 September 2012 at 11:34

      Hi Issac and Grace
      I really do agree he sounds really scary but i really want to find out who this clown is.I wonder if molly will tell us i really want her to.


      Elise

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    4. Isaac2 October 2012 at 16:13

      Thanks for agreeing with us!

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    5. Isaac2 October 2012 at 16:35

      Oh Molly, tell us who Chukles the clown is! Please, please, pleeeeeeease!

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  4. elise28 September 2012 at 11:32

    Hi Molly
    i really like your story its really intresting you used lots of diffrent words so its not boring so you dont repeat everything again and again Who is Chukles the clown? I really want to find out who the clown is I aggree with issac and grace he does sound scary
    Elise

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  5. Prawnsandhummus6 October 2012 at 21:54

    Hiya Molly!

    It sounds like you have coulrophobia! (He sais, having no idea how to spell coulrophobia).

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